I like writing user reviews: help me become better at it.

As the topic title states, I enjoy writing reviews of the games I play. I'm getting better at it too. As someone who does not have English as his native language, I grapple with the language every day, though it is, of course, ever improving. And so as well with my reviews: I've come a long way from this review to this review. 
 
But there is still a lot of room left for improvement. So I'd like you guys to help me out. I have recently written a Mass Effect 2 review. What I'd like you to do is to read it, and then offer me feedback on what I can do to improve the readability of my reviews. Your gripes may concern anything and everything, from poorly explaining a point I try to make in the review to over-using certain words (which I know I do.)
 
The review is here. Please help me out by telling me what is wrong with it, so that my future reviews continue to evolve and improve.
 
Much appreciated.

As the topic title states, I enjoy writing reviews of the games I play. I'm getting better at it too. As someone who does not have English as his native language, I grapple with the language every day, though it is, of course, ever improving. And so as well with my reviews: I've come a long way from this review to this review. 
 
But there is still a lot of room left for improvement. So I'd like you guys to help me out. I have recently written a Mass Effect 2 review. What I'd like you to do is to read it, and then offer me feedback on what I can do to improve the readability of my reviews. Your gripes may concern anything and everything, from poorly explaining a point I try to make in the review to over-using certain words (which I know I do.)
 
The review is here. Please help me out by telling me what is wrong with it, so that my future reviews continue to evolve and improve.
 
Much appreciated.

That was a really good review. The only thing I would have done would be to go into a little detail about the story, like what it is about (Shepard's mission). Other than that, well done!

Good review dawwg. (I'm the dude from American Idol)
 
I think you're a great writer, especially considering english isn't your first language. I would like the ending paragraph if you didn't directly tell the reader to go buy the game though. In this case it may be alright since really everyone SHOULD go buy the game. But the review in its entirety should be what sells the reader on the game, not the last two sentences (By the way, good job. I think it does :P). Anyways maybe you could modify that final sentence or two to convey that you think the amount of content in the game easily warrants a purchase, or something similar. I read a couple more of your reviews and I think this could apply to some of those too.
 
Just a suggestion. Peace... or whatever that American Idol guy would go out with.    : )

Quite well written, especially for a User Review. What makes it especially impressive is the fact that your native language isn't English. 
 
The only problems here are some issues with sentence structure; not that there were any mechanical errors, but some of the structure was awkward, and forced me to go back and re-read the sentence. 
 
Apart from that, cutting out some bloat by streamlining transitions between topics is the only other thing I would work on. Beyond those two minor gripes, it's quite well written. Good work sir.

These are all very true, and I appreciate you guys taking the time to offer feedback. Thanks!
 
Keep 'em coming. :p

That was a great review man! Honestly, if you just had me read that I would've never guessed that English was not your native language. That is very impressive since English is not an easy language to learn. Luckily it is my native language so I never had to learn it the way you did but from what I hear it's not easy. 
  
I will definitely read your reviews in the future especially if they are as detailed as this one.

It's a good review!  English does NOT seem like your second language judging from how well you've written your review.  That said, it reads more like a fan's extended forum post more than an actual game review.   I'll explain a bit...
 
Your piece  jumps right into the nitty gritty of Mass Effect 2 without really introducing the concept behind the game to a reader who may not be familiar with the series.  In general I got the sense there was a lot of assumed familiarity with Mass Effect.  But it's a minor detail compared to how well the review is put together.  Your breakdowns are nice.  You go on a bit long but I can relate to that as my game reviews tend to be on the longer side of things. The challenge of every writer, in my opinion, is brevity:  to say what you need to say in as few words as possible.

Great review brother! Also I hate sounding like an old-school english teacher, but the best way to write better reviews is to play more games with a reviewer's kind of mindstate, and of course write more.

I figured I should respond to the tips given here, so there:
 
@natetodamax said:

" That was a really good review. The only thing I would have done would be to go into a little detail about the story, like what it is about (Shepard's mission). Other than that, well done! "

" Quite well written, especially for a User Review. What makes it especially impressive is the fact that your native language isn't English.  The only problems here are some issues with sentence structure; not that there were any mechanical errors, but some of the structure was awkward, and forced me to go back and re-read the sentence.  Apart from that, cutting out some bloat by streamlining transitions between topics is the only other thing I would work on. Beyond those two minor gripes, it's quite well written. Good work sir. "

" That was a great review man! Honestly, if you just had me read that I would've never guessed that English was not your native language. That is very impressive since English is not an easy language to learn. Luckily it is my native language so I never had to learn it the way you did but from what I hear it's not easy.   I will definitely read your reviews in the future especially if they are as detailed as this one. "

" It's a good review!  English does NOT seem like your second language judging from how well you've written your review.  That said, it reads more like a fan's extended forum post more than an actual game review.   I'll explain a bit... Your piece  jumps right into the nitty gritty of Mass Effect 2 without really introducing the concept behind the game to a reader who may not be familiar with the series.  In general I got the sense there was a lot of assumed familiarity with Mass Effect.  But it's a minor detail compared to how well the review is put together.  Your breakdowns are nice.  You go on a bit long but I can relate to that as my game reviews tend to be on the longer side of things. The challenge of every writer, in my opinion, is brevity:  to say what you need to say in as few words as possible. "

" Great review brother! Also I hate sounding like an old-school english teacher, but the best way to write better reviews is to play more games with a reviewer's kind of mindstate, and of course write more. "

 I'm just posting here because it seems like these threads got locked when the spam was removed. Hoping this will help. Sorry for any disturbance.