@PillClinton said:
Thread title is CRAZY.
I'll do some copyediting here.
For an easy fix, the OP could've just used a little punctuation to tighten things up. Keeping the sentence diction as is, it could look like:
"Psy was on Sabado Gigante," says my mom, who doesn't use a computer.
But why stop there? "Says" is present tense, obviously, but more importantly it is a word chosen specifically for its ability to convey a more dramatic action. When do you hear "says" in conversation? Typically, you hear it when someone is telling you a story and they want to hammer home the importance of the utterance they're retelling to you. "Says" is used when the punchline of the story, the point of whatever it is the storyteller is recounting, is the thing someone else has said.
That begs the question: What is the point the thread title is implying? From reading the newly-edited title above, or digging in and reading the post itself, we can determine the larger statement being made isn't that the mother said something noteworthy, but rather that she is fully cognizant of the PSY zeitgeist despite not actively using a source of information that connects her directly to the popular act, thereby implying the PSY phenomenon has become so pervasive that people with little-to-no familiarity with the internet recognize him (and, by extension, his song).
Let's return to the thread title. Now knowing the angle of the post itself, we can ask, "Does this thread title accurately signpost the contents of the thread?"
Well, not really, it doesn't. The anecdotal nature of the thread title isn't misleading, really, so much as it is confounding. It feels a line that ought to be in the post text itself, as opposed to being the title of the thing. The problem here, in some sense, is the present action of the title. We aren't reading a headline. We're reading a snippet of dialogue that would better support the greater argument being put forth.
A clearer, more direct title would operate with less haphazard inaccuracy. Something like:
My mother doesn't use the internet but knows of PSY.
Or even better:
Can you believe how big PSY is?
Perhaps, in the name of concision:
The PSY Phenomenon
You have to know your intent, really, is the greater point. Maybe write your post first and then write your title? Ask yourself, "Is my mother important enough to put in the thread title?"
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