IronStarkTonyMan (Level 26)

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It is the time for birthdays and such other gift giving holidays for me and i just love giving gifts. Im not the typical guy who just blows off the people and says where my gift or what do i get. I take the time to get a gift that the person will love. For instance, i got one of my best friends cousins Pokemon heart gold, a game he has wanted since it came out. I am going to give it to him today and i will have a bigger smile than him, because knowing he is happy is the biggest gift of all, not to be cheesey er anything. I enjoy giving gifts and getting gifts the same but it fills me with joy to see how they react. I hope your holiday and birthday season is as amazing as mine.

Although it has been a while since my last update i still desperately need feedback. like I really desperately need it. So i am going to give you part of my paragraph im writing, and you guys and gals tell me how you would write it and in what direction you would want it to go in, than i will personally message all of you with comments and my own thought process on it. 
 

The tent came crashing down on top of me covering my entire body. I started freaking out and grabbing for my weapons. The bed collapsed under the weight of our bodies. “Who the hell are you?!” I screamed through the tarp. A muffled noise came from the other side as I rolled out. I looked down at a zora, gagged and tied up. “Holy crap.” I leaned over and untied him, helping him up. “Hey man, are you ok?” He let out a scream and came at me swinging his fins fast, high punch, low swipe. He was blinded by rage that when James came in and chomped his leg he didn’t even realize it until he slumped to the ground from exhaustion. “My name... is Rob… and you won’t stop…” He fell over, passing out on the ground. “What the hell is his problem?” I kicked him over on his back and started tending to his wounds. “He looks like he has been through hell.” James sat next to me and nosed over him. “Close enough, kid, he has seen much better days.” James sat and started listing off everything that happened to Rob. “First he was taken from his home, than he was brought here almost as bait. We don’t know this zora do we?” He turned to Jill with his head tilted as she rushed in. “Is Rob here?” Her eyes trailed down to the ground and she dropped to the ground. “What the fuck did you do?” She screams as she pushes James and I out of the way curling up next to Rob. “You two get the fuck out of here right fucking now!” James and I got up and slowly and backed out of the tent. I turned to him, “Is she involved with him? I mean, I don’t really care but still it’s something we should know.” He sat next to the tent and looked up. “I don’t know, kid, but she should have filled us in. She will in time though.” The sun started falling over the horizon as sounds of talking increased from inside the tent. Jill came out and motioned for us to come in.  

 
That is where it stops and there is a biiiig blank after it for something to happen. i need your help with what. Also here is the beginning and here is update number 1   

  So now i figure i will use these blogs to up date anyone on my story which actually started at class. As of now I have names for characters and i am trying to avoid any major cliches in my story. Yes it is a rescue the princess type story but its going to branch through several popular games. (kind of like kingdom hearts did with Disney but better) Main character, main villains, and main princess are all established so far. Now is where i come to you. I need video game heroes and villains you would love to see in a story type adventure and secondary human characters as well. My biggest concern is the actual adventure itself i have something in mind but i would love some feedback. I appreciate and suggestions and i hope to post more updates in the future.      

My last blog Class got a few comments but one in general was from the user Gamer_152 who said it sounds like the internal monoluge of a character in a movie that blends reality and the video game world. I thought that was an amazing idea and now i am writing a creative story about that same idea. So far im just getting to the good parts, and i could use some help with ideas. like what villains i should have in it from video games and what exactly i could source from. Any helpful advice thoughts or otherwise would be greatly appreciated.