Marigolds & Lilacs

The other day I was suddenly and violently afflicted with hazardous amounts of sheer inspiration and I channeled this energy into a poem.  I've never written poetry from inspiration before.  Usually when I get inspired from stuff I make songs, or write short story so this is my first poem.   
 
So let me know what you guys think and please... support your criticism with a few words. 
 

  

Marigolds & Lilacs

Standing alone

No other soul there

Oblivious to the chilled wind

That stroked my hair

 

  

 Chattering teeth

Tear filled eyes,

Consoled only

By the darkening skies

 

  

 “Beloved Daughter,

Mother, and Wife”

Were the words used

To summarized her life

 

  

 Flurry of emotions

Lethargy, Rage, and Despair

All caused by

This unfortunate affair

 

  

 Approaching reluctantly

The stark, lone plaque

I lay my bouquet

Of Marigolds and Lilacs

 

  

 2010

    -Jesse D. Cromeenes
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Posted by Kyreo

The other day I was suddenly and violently afflicted with hazardous amounts of sheer inspiration and I channeled this energy into a poem.  I've never written poetry from inspiration before.  Usually when I get inspired from stuff I make songs, or write short story so this is my first poem.   
 
So let me know what you guys think and please... support your criticism with a few words. 
 

  

Marigolds & Lilacs

Standing alone

No other soul there

Oblivious to the chilled wind

That stroked my hair

 

  

 Chattering teeth

Tear filled eyes,

Consoled only

By the darkening skies

 

  

 “Beloved Daughter,

Mother, and Wife”

Were the words used

To summarized her life

 

  

 Flurry of emotions

Lethargy, Rage, and Despair

All caused by

This unfortunate affair

 

  

 Approaching reluctantly

The stark, lone plaque

I lay my bouquet

Of Marigolds and Lilacs

 

  

 2010

    -Jesse D. Cromeenes
Posted by AlwaysAngry

Needs more violence and sex/drug references.

Posted by Claude

I liked it. But I like all poetry and feel it hard to criticize something so personal as a poem. 

Posted by mikeeegeee

This is really, really excellent. Great imagery achieved with few words. That's what poetry is all about!