Yeah, so Valentine's day is 2 weeks away, and to that end, I've consulted the assistance of one ChristOnIce to help me refine a sonnet I'm working on for someone about whom I care a great deal. I know that this is probably the worst possible combination of things to post in the Giant Bomb off-topic forums: an atheistic, capitalistic, poem about love.
Well, too fucking bad, I'm doing it anyway. I look forward to seeing what some of you have to say about this idea for a poem.
*NOTE TO ChristOnIce, the second draft I sent your inbox is slightly different; the line order for the third stanza is what I changed, and the first word of the fourth stanza as well.*
February ides with the fruits of trade,
to be offered to you, though not as aid.
A gesture of pride, not humility.
Destruction is not the index of love,
of self, of other, nor our chosen bonds.
The choice to value, no mystical con;
though the mere here and now is not enough.
Your presence is felt as I pursue my goals.
Understanding that ‘we’ do not exist;
Though you and I do, I strongly insist.
Love, properly expressed, as two wholes.
Cementing this promise by how I live,
Value offered surpassed by what you give
So understand the compulsion to promise more
Upward trends, strive for better than before
It’s in your total multichromacy
And our courtship beyond diplomacy
Your example, my muse, through all the strife,
to see how this love evolved, trace my life.
Well, too fucking bad, I'm doing it anyway. I look forward to seeing what some of you have to say about this idea for a poem.
*NOTE TO ChristOnIce, the second draft I sent your inbox is slightly different; the line order for the third stanza is what I changed, and the first word of the fourth stanza as well.*
Sonnet Against Pity Sex
I’ll love you with all my abilitiesFebruary ides with the fruits of trade,
to be offered to you, though not as aid.
A gesture of pride, not humility.
Destruction is not the index of love,
of self, of other, nor our chosen bonds.
The choice to value, no mystical con;
though the mere here and now is not enough.
Your presence is felt as I pursue my goals.
Understanding that ‘we’ do not exist;
Though you and I do, I strongly insist.
Love, properly expressed, as two wholes.
Cementing this promise by how I live,
Value offered surpassed by what you give
So understand the compulsion to promise more
Upward trends, strive for better than before
It’s in your total multichromacy
And our courtship beyond diplomacy
Your example, my muse, through all the strife,
to see how this love evolved, trace my life.
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Preamble; Three (3) Clauses
(Two (2) Principle-oriented clauses (I & III) and One (1) clerical)Clause I
The Suicratic Ethics are all about finding the most effective and enjoyable ways of reaching one's goals, to that end I hereby pass the following act of personal ethics, to apply to actions taken and decisions made during the calendar year, 2010.Clause II
Four (4) Resolutions have been passed in this act, heretofore referred to as "2010-IV-a", "2010-IV-b", "2010-IV-c", and "2010-IV-d"Clause III
All four (4) acts are interrelated and correlated to one another, and to the first steps taken in turning my life from the piece of shit it was prior to December 2009 into the greatness that felt so attainable during said month.Body; One (1) Clause, Four (4) Resolutions
Clause IV
a) Having realized and propagated the importance of time-preference-delay, a savings goal of $5000CAD (five thousand Canadian Dollars) is passed, and must be met prior to January 1, 2011, and improved upon thereafter. Prior to the saving of the first dollar, all pre-existing debts must be paid.b) Having discovered ample evidence of the necessity of good fitness during calendar year 2009, a weight loss goal of 50 lbs (fifty imperial 'pounds') is passed, and must be met prior to January 1, 2011, and improved upon thereafter. Additionally, medical and kinesiological consultation will be sought on the most effective weight-loss method for greatest-possible flexibility, stamina, and strength.
c) Having rediscovered the joy of actually playing actual hockey, additional funds (funds not to be taken from those sequestered by Resolution 2010-IV-a) are hereby to be sequestered for the purchase of new hockey equipment and membership in an adult recreational hockey league within reasonable commute distance. (Reasonable commute distance is to be defined as accessible with no greater than 35 minutes of travel).
d) Having calculated the immense amount of money spent on an annual basis on recreational substances, the yearly amount of money to be spent on such substances must not exceed $1 000 as of January 1, 2011, and reduced further thereafter.
