My New Child (Song)...Is Kinda Drugtacular?

Peoplez I have too preach...Why have I made a song for the stoned? Maybe one to many cartoons from Gainax..... But that is for you to judge...  
It has a crappy intro and crappy bass because every piece of  software made the bass louder than it was suppose to be. I also made it far too quickly (only a couple of hours) so mistakes are bound, there still is a bit of polish. 
 
 

Peoplez I have too preach...Why have I made a song for the stoned? Maybe one to many cartoons from Gainax..... But that is for you to judge...  
It has a crappy intro and crappy bass because every piece of  software made the bass louder than it was suppose to be. I also made it far too quickly (only a couple of hours) so mistakes are bound, there still is a bit of polish. 
 
 

" I think the idea is pretty cool to be honest. I really like the crazy/trippy warped vibe it has going on.   I think it needs a normal constant though, besides the beat that enters around the 2:00 mark.. and after the exit, try and throw it off by waking the listener up with a very high bit rate fill (320?) , to a very clean upbeat transition. I know the clarity doesn't come through youtube all that well, but a clean change of tempo, and mixing some pads/drones in with it will do wonders.   Also, come up with something very constant for the beginning. When you do a scale intro, it gets the point across, as you're doing.. but progressively adding to it will dry out the main beat as it comes together.. Start simple. Jeff does a great job of setting a bass line, then adding his quirky beats to it. He donsn't typically layer at a time. He'll give you the main course right away, but add in a few dinner rolls here and there. Same goes here... get to trippy, but don't give the audience a taste of it until you're ready to dish it out. Then do your crazy "in a trance" stuff, and exit and change tempos with something very clean, and numbing. Then incorporate the trance in bits (like a mix).. and exit in a dark, sadistic way.  Always a good lasting impression ; ) "