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Outline for Meat Whore

Had a weird idea the other day for a story. I liked it so much I decided to actually do something with it. Here is the detailed outline of what I hope is to become a nice lil short story sometime in the future. FYI there are going to be a lot of bad grammar in the following. Not really going for a perfect work of literature in an outline. 
 
It's a story of a lady who grew up not interested in meat at all. No real moral decision, she just thinks eating flesh is gross and the meat itself is off putting. she even tried it a few times as a lil kid, but didn't care for it. But one day, at around the age of 20 or so someone suckers her into having a slice of prime rib at a buffet. after the first bite she is hooked. so much so that the server has to turn her away when she comes up the 5th time, upon receiving orders to do so from up high. as any addiction it starts off simple enough, she has steak maybe once or twice a week for a month, but soon after that she falls to having it everyday, multiple times throughout the day as well. So much so that she has to drink 6 doses of fiber supplements a day in order to counteract all the protein pumping through her veins. 
 
Her addiction also strains her work and social life. At work she finds any way to sneak a bite of jerky, and is always day dreaming about the ribeye she is going to have later on. Her workflow drops severely and eventually she ends up losing her job. Naturally this leads to her on the streets, lurking behind bbq joints begging for scraps to survive. One of the bbq restraunt owners wises up and tells the lady that if she hooks for him, he'll supply her with all the meat she will ever need as well as provide a bed for her to sleep on. basically the john pay him in money and she gets her cut as meat. The deal proves pretty lucrative for both of them. She gets all the meat she can desire, and he gets extra revenue. Hell her ass is so blown out she doesn't even need to take fiber supplements anymore. Sure, he smacks here up a few good times and she has a few STDs, but she can rationalize it in her mind by telling herself that soon she'll write a cookbook and her life'll take off from there. 
 
One day, word gets out that all she is really doing the hooking for is the meat, and the customers start just paying her straight up for her services. This doesn't make her pimp too pleased about it. He beats her to a bloody pulp. She screams at him for being an asshole, raving on about how he treats her like shit, after all she has done for him, that he doesn't even care about the way the meat he gives her is prepared anymore, etc. He decides he has enough of it, stuffs her in the trunk of his car and drops her off in the middle of no where.
 
She somehow stumbles her way into a clinic, where she is taken care of by a cute male nurse. Decides to turn her life around, and start fresh. after a few months of therapy and medical treatment she gets everything going. gets a job as a bartender and even gets in hot with the nurse. they eventually get married and have 3 kids. all raised vegan and never told about their mom's wild early days.     
 
 
So there it is,  I dun know what I expect people to say about it, if they give two fucks enough to comment. I just really wanted to put it somewhere, to make it seem like I am doing something with the idea.
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Had a weird idea the other day for a story. I liked it so much I decided to actually do something with it. Here is the detailed outline of what I hope is to become a nice lil short story sometime in the future. FYI there are going to be a lot of bad grammar in the following. Not really going for a perfect work of literature in an outline. 
 
It's a story of a lady who grew up not interested in meat at all. No real moral decision, she just thinks eating flesh is gross and the meat itself is off putting. she even tried it a few times as a lil kid, but didn't care for it. But one day, at around the age of 20 or so someone suckers her into having a slice of prime rib at a buffet. after the first bite she is hooked. so much so that the server has to turn her away when she comes up the 5th time, upon receiving orders to do so from up high. as any addiction it starts off simple enough, she has steak maybe once or twice a week for a month, but soon after that she falls to having it everyday, multiple times throughout the day as well. So much so that she has to drink 6 doses of fiber supplements a day in order to counteract all the protein pumping through her veins. 
 
Her addiction also strains her work and social life. At work she finds any way to sneak a bite of jerky, and is always day dreaming about the ribeye she is going to have later on. Her workflow drops severely and eventually she ends up losing her job. Naturally this leads to her on the streets, lurking behind bbq joints begging for scraps to survive. One of the bbq restraunt owners wises up and tells the lady that if she hooks for him, he'll supply her with all the meat she will ever need as well as provide a bed for her to sleep on. basically the john pay him in money and she gets her cut as meat. The deal proves pretty lucrative for both of them. She gets all the meat she can desire, and he gets extra revenue. Hell her ass is so blown out she doesn't even need to take fiber supplements anymore. Sure, he smacks here up a few good times and she has a few STDs, but she can rationalize it in her mind by telling herself that soon she'll write a cookbook and her life'll take off from there. 
 
One day, word gets out that all she is really doing the hooking for is the meat, and the customers start just paying her straight up for her services. This doesn't make her pimp too pleased about it. He beats her to a bloody pulp. She screams at him for being an asshole, raving on about how he treats her like shit, after all she has done for him, that he doesn't even care about the way the meat he gives her is prepared anymore, etc. He decides he has enough of it, stuffs her in the trunk of his car and drops her off in the middle of no where.
 
She somehow stumbles her way into a clinic, where she is taken care of by a cute male nurse. Decides to turn her life around, and start fresh. after a few months of therapy and medical treatment she gets everything going. gets a job as a bartender and even gets in hot with the nurse. they eventually get married and have 3 kids. all raised vegan and never told about their mom's wild early days.     
 
 
So there it is,  I dun know what I expect people to say about it, if they give two fucks enough to comment. I just really wanted to put it somewhere, to make it seem like I am doing something with the idea.
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This is pretty good, nice first post.

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Pretty good first post!

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Man, don't give me the outline. Give me the actual story.

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1) good first post. 2) replace "meat" with "crack"... now be honest, whos mind did i blow by making that connection!?!?!? 

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@mrfizzy said:

" 1) good first post. 2) replace "meat" with "crack"... now be honest, whos mind did i blow by making that connection!?!?!?  "

I want to go to a crack buffet!  
 
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"  Not really going for a perfect work of literature... "  

Great success! 
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I really dont see how writing a story about a meat junkie is a good idea,but hey,to each his own and welcome to GB.

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Jeff Bridges as the meat.

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@HS21 said:
" Jeff Bridges as the meat. "
Make him the cute male nurse too because he totally is.
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@DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" Jeff Bridges as the meat. "
Make him the cute male nurse too because he totally is. "
And the pimp because you know he can pull it off.
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I liked the part where her ass was all blown out.

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@HS21 said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" Jeff Bridges as the meat. "
Make him the cute male nurse too because he totally is. "
And the pimp because you know he can pull it off. "
Fuck it, just make him every character. 
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She must have gotten pretty fuckin fat over the course of this addiction.

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@DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" Jeff Bridges as the meat. "
Make him the cute male nurse too because he totally is. "
And the pimp because you know he can pull it off. "
Fuck it, just make him every character.  "
Meet John Malkovich except Jeff Bridges plays John Malkovich.
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that was pretty entertaining for the first half or so, interesting idea

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Sounds terrible. Sexists and anti-vegetarianism. It feels like you have nothing to say, stick with weird ideas of social workings, little research and not very fleshed out as well. Why does she give in to prostitution and how does she feel about it? What are you trying to say about meat? Why does she need fiber supplements? If she's been vegetarian as long as she's remembered I'm sure she's found a good diet with fiber in it. What's with the 'cute male nurse' it feels contrived and because it's kind of meaningless, it's sexist. The lady is rescued by the white knight sort of thing. That shit's old.
 
Her entire story is just going from one contrived problem to the next. You made her a prostitute without going into anything about what it's truly like, making it seem insulting. She gets STD's and beaten and raped and you glaze over that like it's not a problem. I don't know, maybe what you have in your head is well thought out, deep and inspiring and has lots of metaphors about meat and the consumerist effect it has on society, and about women and their struggles that are still continuing today, and maybe you really flesh out her prostitution days showing the world not to think poor or even pity them, for they're all still strong human beings. But I don't know. I'm just talking from what I've read in this draft.

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@HS21 said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" Jeff Bridges as the meat. "
Make him the cute male nurse too because he totally is. "
And the pimp because you know he can pull it off. "
Fuck it, just make him every character.  "
Meet John Malkovich except Jeff Bridges plays John Malkovich. "
YES
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@DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" Jeff Bridges as the meat. "
Make him the cute male nurse too because he totally is. "
And the pimp because you know he can pull it off. "
Fuck it, just make him every character.  "
Meet John Malkovich except Jeff Bridges plays John Malkovich. "
YES "
Meating John Malkovich
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@HaltIamReptar said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" Jeff Bridges as the meat. "
Make him the cute male nurse too because he totally is. "
And the pimp because you know he can pull it off. "
Fuck it, just make him every character.  "
Meet John Malkovich except Jeff Bridges plays John Malkovich. "
YES "
Meating John Malkovich "
Let's workshop this. It'll be a million sella. 
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@HS21 said:
" @HaltIamReptar said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" Jeff Bridges as the meat. "
Make him the cute male nurse too because he totally is. "
And the pimp because you know he can pull it off. "
Fuck it, just make him every character.  "
Meet John Malkovich except Jeff Bridges plays John Malkovich. "
YES "
Meating John Malkovich "
Let's workshop this. It'll be a million sella.  "
I'm in.
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Okay, I guess. I've come up with better ideas but where I fail is in my inability to write stories with any sort of cohesion or staying-on-topic-ness. So, if you can actually make a short story out of this I'll give you some props.

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@DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" @HaltIamReptar said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" Jeff Bridges as the meat. "
Make him the cute male nurse too because he totally is. "
And the pimp because you know he can pull it off. "
Fuck it, just make him every character.  "
Meet John Malkovich except Jeff Bridges plays John Malkovich. "
YES "
Meating John Malkovich "
Let's workshop this. It'll be a million sella.  "
I'm in. "
I may have just seen this thread, but after seeing these ideas, I must pledge myself to the cause, right now.
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@LOZZAT said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" @HaltIamReptar said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" @DrPockets000 said:
" @HS21 said:
" Jeff Bridges as the meat. "
Make him the cute male nurse too because he totally is. "
And the pimp because you know he can pull it off. "
Fuck it, just make him every character.  "
Meet John Malkovich except Jeff Bridges plays John Malkovich. "
YES "
Meating John Malkovich "
Let's workshop this. It'll be a million sella.  "
I'm in. "
I may have just seen this thread, but after seeing these ideas, I must pledge myself to the cause, right now. "
No disrespect to the OP but, I think we may have stumbled upon something far more incredible here gentlemen.