Fail Fortress: Doctors orders

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Let me know what you think, always like to hear criticism.
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#1  Edited By MasterJohnboy

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Let me know what you think, always like to hear criticism.
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#2  Edited By mattjam3000

This happens to me way to often, just not in TF2 cause I dont play it but yeah.

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#3  Edited By Snail

It's pretty funny, but here are some issues:
 

  • You got the Heavy-speak all wrong. The heavy would never say "or anything", for instance.
  • Characters aren't expressive enough
  • Formatting is poor
  • The logo sucks
 
I still laughed. It's a funny idea.
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#4  Edited By MasterJohnboy
@Snail: Glad you enjoyed it, out of intrest when you say logo are you referring to the whole thing or just the red sarcastic gamer face?
Formatting is somethign I'm struggling to improve to be honest, i'm not what to do to make it look cooler, I will have to think about it a bit. I see what you mean with the characters not really expressing enough al look in to that in the future.  Although I use tf2 chars I tend not to bother about how the characters act in tf2 but  I see your point since I did use it for the medic here.
 
Thanks for the feedback lots of stuff for me to think about it.
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#5  Edited By Snail
@MasterJohnboy: I just don't like the whole Sarcastic Gamer logo. The letters and the face... just looks unprofessional.
 
I think you should really overreact their expressions. That's what most gMod comics do.
 
And as for the structure, I can link you to some fine deviantArt artists who have their own comic books, you can see how they structure their comics.
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#6  Edited By MasterJohnboy
@Snail: Yeah if you could link me that would be great,
 
To explain the the sarcastic gamer logo, since i post it on their site as a communtiy comic they asked me to put the logo in it.
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#7  Edited By Snail
@MasterJohnboy: Here you go, the links:
 
  • This guy makes great comic books IMO. He's a personal friend. Check these to see a good way to implement titles in comic books in a panel of their own, and check these to see how to seamlessly implement the title into a comic book. The former shows a logo that keeps changing (from number 129 and before) and is humorous and fits perfectly with the rest of the format. The latter shows a logo that is seamlessly and somewhat originally implemented into the comic strip, kind of like a trademark symbol.
  • This guy has a different way of approaching it, as you can see here. Very classy too. It's not complex or overworked, he simply writes the title of the strip outside the panels, in an outer frame. I think it is very simply and efficient.
 
These two were what I came up with after a quick search. If you want more examples you're free to look around dA and I guess I can give you some more artists.
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#8  Edited By MasterJohnboy
@Snail: Thanks al have a look
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#9  Edited By crusader8463

Hehe, that has happened to me many a time.

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#10  Edited By MasterJohnboy
@crusader8463: Yeah think it happens to everyone at some point lol
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#11  Edited By Yukoei

I really enjoyed reading that! Keep it up! ^_^

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#12  Edited By MasterJohnboy
@Yukoei: Thanks!
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#13  Edited By Six

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
i mean, turn left.

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#14  Edited By MasterJohnboy
@Six: yeah lol
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#15  Edited By SumDeus

Aha, that's clever.

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#16  Edited By MasterJohnboy
@SumDeus: 
Cheers :)