My mid-term for Illustration Class (Image Remade)

So while many people went out to party for their Spring Break, I spent it working on several mid-terms for various classes. Well one project is now finished. Thought I might show it off. We had two choices, make an advertisement for a watch company or make an advertisement for entertainment (i.e. movie poster). It could be for a real movie or one of our choice. 
 
I chose to do a movie poster for my own story, and this is what I spent all week working on.  
 
Can you guess the two images that are heavily inspired by games? One is far more obvious than the other, I assure you. : )
 
There was a point where my computer glitched and I lost about 90% of all the work, and I was half-way through with it. Cost me a full day to remake it all. >: ( 
 
Edit: Okay people, you've all expressed your criticisms, especially in regards to the girl in the corner. Let it be known that I will fix it to the best of my abilities, before I turn it in on Monday.

 Check the next page for the new image.
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Posted by Bones8677

So while many people went out to party for their Spring Break, I spent it working on several mid-terms for various classes. Well one project is now finished. Thought I might show it off. We had two choices, make an advertisement for a watch company or make an advertisement for entertainment (i.e. movie poster). It could be for a real movie or one of our choice. 
 
I chose to do a movie poster for my own story, and this is what I spent all week working on.  
 
Can you guess the two images that are heavily inspired by games? One is far more obvious than the other, I assure you. : )
 
There was a point where my computer glitched and I lost about 90% of all the work, and I was half-way through with it. Cost me a full day to remake it all. >: ( 
 
Edit: Okay people, you've all expressed your criticisms, especially in regards to the girl in the corner. Let it be known that I will fix it to the best of my abilities, before I turn it in on Monday.

 Check the next page for the new image.
Posted by loldetaerleo

Tracing pictures of helghast =/= awesome.

Posted by Bones8677
@loldetaerleo: You doubt my skills?????
 
Sir! I Demand Satisfaction!!!
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
hehe
Posted by roscoe

whatd you do those in?

Posted by Bones8677
@roscoe: I did it almost entirely in Corel Painter Essential 3. 
A free program that came with my art tablet. Most of the work started out as sketches that were inked out then scanned to be corrected and colored.
Posted by Icemael

The faces look a little weird, but aside from that, very nice!

Posted by Bones8677
@Icemael: I was going for a sort of Americanized Anime look or something similar to the art style of Cowboy Bebop. I originally was going to do full on rendering but then I realized that it would not be possible for me to finish the work and be proud of it at the same time. So I went with a stylized look.
Posted by roscoe
@Bones8677 said:
" @roscoe: I did it almost entirely in Corel Painter Essential 3.  A free program that came with my art tablet. Most of the work started out as sketches that were inked out then scanned to be corrected and colored. "
cool, ive been thinking about getting a tablet for a while now...as for the poster, i think the yellow in it is a bit over powering in the windows. also the face on the bottom left draws a bit too much attention, maybe a bit more shadow over it so it would look as though it were in the background instead of in the foreground. i dont really like the outline around the 3 characters in the middle, and think that if you tried to make it a little more opaque, or even took it out it would look nicer. great job though, the shadowing and sense of perspective in it are very well done
Posted by Bones8677
@roscoe: Thanks for the criticisms. I'll look into maybe fixing some of those before I have Kinkos print this thing out. ^.^
Posted by Icemael
@Bones8677: Yeah, but the eyes looks really off. And the blond dude/chick (can't tell) and the guy on the right's heads are very oddly shaped.
Posted by roscoe

yeah, no problem...hope the print turns out well

Posted by PillClinton

this is cool beans, man.

Posted by dbz1995

Brad Bolton is an awesome ass name.

Posted by Bones8677
@dbz1995: Seriously?
Posted by dbz1995
@Bones8677 said:
" @dbz1995: Seriously? "
Yeah seriously! Brad Bolton is a seriously awesome ass name.
Posted by Bones8677
@dbz1995: uh...thanks.
Posted by oldschool
@dbz1995 said:
" Brad Bolton is an awesome ass name. "
Not as awesome as Michael Bolton.  Maybe Brad is the son of the kickass 80s mullet wearing singer  :/ 
 
Good work man, but I share the criticism of the character down the bottom left.  It is too stark and draws the eye to it, but not in a good way.  Plus, it is the least interesting character and looks out of place.
Posted by Bones8677
@oldschool: Okay guys, I'll need to do some serious work with the girl in the corner. I originally wanted her to look much different but I couldn't find a good model to help me with the certain body position I needed. Looks like serious work still needs to be done.
 
And as far as the Michael Bolton comment. Yeah, REAL funny. Not like that's the 2,000th time I've heard that. >.>
Seriously, though, every time someone brings that up, I always tell them that he is my uncle. ^.^ 
People totally fall for it too. :)
Posted by oldschool
@Bones8677 said:
" @oldschool: Okay guys, I'll need to do some serious work with the girl in the corner. I originally wanted her to look much different but I couldn't find a good model to help me with the certain body position I needed. Looks like serious work still needs to be done.  And as far as the Michael Bolton comment. Yeah, REAL funny. Not like that's the 2,000th time I've heard that. >.> Seriously, though, every time someone brings that up, I always tell them that he is my uncle. ^.^  People totally fall for it too. :) "
But, am I the first person from Australia to make that lame joke?  I thought most people here would be too young to even get the lame reference.  My daughter is named Ripley, so she always gets the obvious Alien or Believe It Or Not lines.  She hasn't tired of it yet.  Give it time  :-)
Posted by c1337us

Looks good dude. But get rid of the chick on the bottom left is the only thing I would suggest if I were being honest. Or change her a little so she doesnt draw so much attention.

Posted by Bones8677
@oldschool: You named her after the Sigourney character didn't you? >.<  You brought that on her. 
 
Michael Bolton's name is just a stage name anyway. It's actually Bolotin. Bastard. ;P 
 
^.^
Posted by Jeffery

 
I would remove the girl in the corner.
 
Btw,how do you do those posters?

Posted by oldschool
@Bones8677 said:
" @oldschool: You named her after the Sigourney character didn't you? >.<  You brought that on her.   Michael Bolton's name is just a stage name anyway. It's actually Bolotin. Bastard. ;P   ^.^ "
You know way too much about Michael Bolton for your own good man  :-) 
 
Yes, she was named after Sigourney's character, L. Ripley.  As for bringing that on her, her full name is Ripley A. Lien.  She is 17 now and to be honest, despite the doomsayers, she has never once been given a hard time about her name and her friends think it is pretty cool.  She gets called Rip most of the time.
Posted by Bones8677
@oldschool: Being constantly associated to him has forced me to look him up. ^.^
Posted by Jeffery

 
I made one too!!

Posted by dopeman
@Jeffery:  that shit sucks.
Posted by Bones8677

Okay folks I remade the image. How's it look now?

Posted by armaan8014
@Bones8677: Cool! Looks even better now!
Posted by iam3green

pretty badass posters :)

Posted by Bruce
@Bones8677:  
 
I'd make the top font more interesting. That's about it.
Edited by ZanzibarBreeze

The second one is dope.
 
@Jeffery said:

"  
I made one too!!
"

Also dope.
 
@Bruce: I think the top font is good. To each his own, I guess.
Posted by Bones8677

Anyone else have some comments?

Posted by ChristOnIce
@Bones8677: 
First, what is the point?  Is the intention to make something that's just pretty or to demonstrate design capability?
 
The art itself is mediocre, if underdeveloped.  While it's serviceable, there isn't much style to it.  It resembles about thirty generic flash products.  The character expressions are a bit overstated and seem unconnected.  Overall, the art itself is adequate.
 
The design itself is poor.  The color palette causes everything to blend together, save yellow and flesh.  This inhibits any visual style and makes the poster very forgettable.  The background and the fellows in the lower right corner fit the same style, but nothing else does.  The characters look like they belong in a Saturday morning cartoon, while everything else appears sci-fi.  The top typeface is shit.  It is boring and doesn't sufficiently contrast with the background.  The balance of the whole image is ineffective.  Opposing the phallic image of the blonde with dark, small people doesn't work.  At a glance, few would even notice that they were there.  Aside from masking their presence, the blonde attracts attention away from the trio in the center and, more importantly, the title.  There's no sense of direction or coherence.  The character poses are as generic as possible.  It's not so much a reference as a cliche at this point. 
 
It's not that it's shit.  As a drawing, it's fine.  As a movie poster, though, it needs a lot of work conceptually.  You should study up on balance.  Size, shape, and color determine a lot when it comes to advertising.  Then look at some good compositions in advertising.  A decent picture and a good advertisement aren't the same.  A bit of study and revision could turn this into the latter.
Posted by wwfundertaker

Thats looks brilliant.

Posted by Bones8677
@ChristOnIce:  Geez man, step on my balls while your at it. ;P
 
I've read your post several times and have considered the faults you have stated. Perhaps it would help if you were familiar with the story of this "movie." Perhaps you could see that the composition, especially the color pallet is very appropriate. It's a Sci-fi set in a Nihilistic future. Hence the dark color pallet.
 
The trio are all soldiers like the ones in the corner and as those soldiers they had little humanity. This matched the setting of the story, to the point that the people and dark buildings were practically a single entity, cold, un-inviting and emotionless. Not to mention having the soldiers blend into the background, it forces the glowing eyes forward, giving a very inhuman appearance. Another mark of their anonymity as the soldiers. 
 
It's very interesting that you described the image of the blonde as "phallic," which gives me a whole different perspective of that character that I had not seen before. ^.^ It's actually quite funny now that I think of it. A lot of people suggested taking out the blonde but I remade her because I felt she needed to be in the picture as her character radically affects the actions and feelings of the other characters in the latter half of the series. 
 
Thanks for your impute though.
Posted by Jeffery
@dopeman said:
" @Jeffery:  that shit sucks. "
Thank you.
Posted by SeriouslyNow
@Bones8677 said:
" Anyone else have some comments? "
My only one issue is that the buildings in the background lack depth and so the conflict with the alien tower thing mid-focus.  I think it would be better if you made the back layer of buildings slightly lighter so that they display a measure of depth and also so they don't conflict with the central alien spire.
Edited by Icemael

The blonde woman's face looks better in the remade poster, but her head looks kind of... unnatural and, well, detached. It's a combination of the neck's length and the head's position.
 
Still, as a whole, it's better than the first. The blonde takes up a little bit too much space -- especially with that long sniper rifle -- but she doesn't stand out as much, which is good.

Posted by Jesus

Those look great man.

Posted by Still_I_Cry

I don't know much about design and such (only took one class on it) but I do like the second poster more than the first.