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I suck at titling things so this is my title.(It is a TL;DR)

Tried my best. Hope whoever reads it gets some form of enjoyment, whatever it may be, out of it.

Edit : Fixed some of the typos I found. I also changed whatever was there before frayed to..well..frayed :)

Edit 2: Fixed more typos, changed a few words around.

Edit 3: Changed some more words, fixed some punctuation, tense and word errors.

The maid.

Walks me to the study, I observe,

There is nothing unique about her physique.

Stump legged, stout, plain faced, pale.

Plain.

She gurgles a common courtesy

Of which I care not to acknowledge.

With a sigh of contempt, or perhaps

Not contempt, it matters not to I.

Dismissed!

Now I, I reside on this lush armchair,

So very plump, glutted with the feathers

Of one avian creature or another.

You greedy little chair!

The stuffy study

Suffocates me with the

Odor of musty books. The shelves bursting with theology

Seem to stare, nay, glare my way. I ask of them,

“What need have I of John, Epistles or Deuteronomy?”

God does not call, or visit, or write.

Lord knows! He has my number, my address.

I see no need to talk to or visit him in turn,

Such is the way of a healthy friendship.

[Are we friends God? Answer me!]

I snort in derision. I need no God.

I am God, my own God.

The Devil quakes, I perceive. He fears me.

[What nonsense! A creation of theologians and nothing more]

A curious rattle from-

From the as of now fringed contempt,

As of soon-

An odor.

Cloying and viscous,

Heavy and sulfurous,

Assaults my senses, my very being [insidious].

The air.

Now curiously thin and

So very curiously invasive!

The vapors crawl along

My sweaty, clammy flesh.

Sentient, they seek my deepest secrets,

The darkest recesses of my intellect.

They work their way into my veins via my pores

And deviously invade my heart, my mind.

The books.

Gone, nay, replaced.

Dante’s Inferno, Milton’s Paradise Lost,

The writings of De Sade in gold embossed.

“Good day, Good day!

A satin voice rends the air,

Cheery, light,

Neatly laced in decay.

A gentleman

[Elegant in ensemble.

In custom and manner, he is well versed]

Leans casually on the ash colored door frame.

Now I, I cannot act.

Restrained upon my throne

By skeletal fingers wrapped in

Rosary beads and flayed Bishop vestments.

“Do you believe in Satan?”

Frantically, fearfully, I shake my head “No”.

“Ah, good! He was but a counterbalance. A concoction

Created by the minds of desperate theologians to explain Evil.

Those clever, clever men!

Your parents and your priests

Who professed for Me, My love for you, all of you.

Who are you, you whom I created in my visage,

[To which you disgrace me, may I add]

To speak of My intent towards you?

Humanity begs and grovels when it fits their needs,

Sing my praises when they have nothing for which to plead!

They curse me[heathens] when I sit and watch

Them, their families, swept away, crushed,

Poisoned, victimized, cancer ridden, in a hospice bed they lie.

Die.

Filthy, spoiled, transparent, self-entitled bastards!

You who mock me, you who worship me, you who

Know not if I am.

I am Who am!

Your parents, Bishops, priests, those who scorned,

Those who mocked, those who denied, those who worshipped,

They now dine at my table!

Laughing, jubilant,

With Judas, Lucifer, Hitler and Stalin.

Oh, you may ask them yourself when you arrive!”

I quiver, quake, shrilly cry.

My legs flare, reduced to ashen dust

My body-

[The maid hears the cry.

She finds only a mound of dust,

Brushes it up. Tosses it out

The open window, to be swept away by the frigid morning air.

She swore, to God no less,

That she had beheld a face in the dust as it was whisked away.

She claimed that, though I doubt, it seemed to be wailing in despair.]

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Tried my best. Hope whoever reads it gets some form of enjoyment, whatever it may be, out of it.

Edit : Fixed some of the typos I found. I also changed whatever was there before frayed to..well..frayed :)

Edit 2: Fixed more typos, changed a few words around.

Edit 3: Changed some more words, fixed some punctuation, tense and word errors.

The maid.

Walks me to the study, I observe,

There is nothing unique about her physique.

Stump legged, stout, plain faced, pale.

Plain.

She gurgles a common courtesy

Of which I care not to acknowledge.

With a sigh of contempt, or perhaps

Not contempt, it matters not to I.

Dismissed!

Now I, I reside on this lush armchair,

So very plump, glutted with the feathers

Of one avian creature or another.

You greedy little chair!

The stuffy study

Suffocates me with the

Odor of musty books. The shelves bursting with theology

Seem to stare, nay, glare my way. I ask of them,

“What need have I of John, Epistles or Deuteronomy?”

God does not call, or visit, or write.

Lord knows! He has my number, my address.

I see no need to talk to or visit him in turn,

Such is the way of a healthy friendship.

[Are we friends God? Answer me!]

I snort in derision. I need no God.

I am God, my own God.

The Devil quakes, I perceive. He fears me.

[What nonsense! A creation of theologians and nothing more]

A curious rattle from-

From the as of now fringed contempt,

As of soon-

An odor.

Cloying and viscous,

Heavy and sulfurous,

Assaults my senses, my very being [insidious].

The air.

Now curiously thin and

So very curiously invasive!

The vapors crawl along

My sweaty, clammy flesh.

Sentient, they seek my deepest secrets,

The darkest recesses of my intellect.

They work their way into my veins via my pores

And deviously invade my heart, my mind.

The books.

Gone, nay, replaced.

Dante’s Inferno, Milton’s Paradise Lost,

The writings of De Sade in gold embossed.

“Good day, Good day!

A satin voice rends the air,

Cheery, light,

Neatly laced in decay.

A gentleman

[Elegant in ensemble.

In custom and manner, he is well versed]

Leans casually on the ash colored door frame.

Now I, I cannot act.

Restrained upon my throne

By skeletal fingers wrapped in

Rosary beads and flayed Bishop vestments.

“Do you believe in Satan?”

Frantically, fearfully, I shake my head “No”.

“Ah, good! He was but a counterbalance. A concoction

Created by the minds of desperate theologians to explain Evil.

Those clever, clever men!

Your parents and your priests

Who professed for Me, My love for you, all of you.

Who are you, you whom I created in my visage,

[To which you disgrace me, may I add]

To speak of My intent towards you?

Humanity begs and grovels when it fits their needs,

Sing my praises when they have nothing for which to plead!

They curse me[heathens] when I sit and watch

Them, their families, swept away, crushed,

Poisoned, victimized, cancer ridden, in a hospice bed they lie.

Die.

Filthy, spoiled, transparent, self-entitled bastards!

You who mock me, you who worship me, you who

Know not if I am.

I am Who am!

Your parents, Bishops, priests, those who scorned,

Those who mocked, those who denied, those who worshipped,

They now dine at my table!

Laughing, jubilant,

With Judas, Lucifer, Hitler and Stalin.

Oh, you may ask them yourself when you arrive!”

I quiver, quake, shrilly cry.

My legs flare, reduced to ashen dust

My body-

[The maid hears the cry.

She finds only a mound of dust,

Brushes it up. Tosses it out

The open window, to be swept away by the frigid morning air.

She swore, to God no less,

That she had beheld a face in the dust as it was whisked away.

She claimed that, though I doubt, it seemed to be wailing in despair.]

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Read to the tune of Lady Gaga's Poker Face.

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@Ravenlight said:

Read to the tune of Lady Gaga's Poker Face.

Too long for that?

:D

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The hell is this?

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Uhhh....what?

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@Video_Game_King said:

The hell is this?

Exactly!

@Milkman said:

Uhhh....what?

I don't know.

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OH GOD!

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@Winternet said:

OH GOD!

I know, it is quite long..

:(

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@Still_I_Cry said:

@Winternet said:

OH GOD!

I know, it is quite long..

:(

That being said, I don't care much for the style of writing, but the main message and tone I like.

I would suggest a less flowery and more raw writing. I think it would convey the message much better. That's just my opinion.

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Yeah no offense but fuck reading that.

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@Winternet said:

@Still_I_Cry said:

@Winternet said:

OH GOD!

I know, it is quite long..

:(

That being said, I don't care much for the style of writing, but the main message and tone I like.

I would suggest a less flowery and more raw writing. I think it would convey the message much better. That's just my opinion.

Ok, thanks for the helpful suggestion!

I am trying to cut down on the flowery :)

I am/was going for more raw and gritty, doesn't look like it panned out as well as I would have liked. (if at all, but I'm working on it!)

Too flowery has been a problem for me..as I said, I am trying to break the habit!

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Fucking philistines!

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If it's TL: DR, don't bother.

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@eugenesaxe said:

If it's TL: DR, don't bother.

Some people may read it, I was just warning those who didn't want to read something long.

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@dudeglove: I actually had no idea what was going on, I posted this before checking the boards :P